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Fic - Five Senses

  • Apr. 1st, 2007 at 7:40 PM
ranrata: (house-housewilson)
Title Five Senses
Rating PG
Pairing House/Wilson
Word Count 405
Spoilers None
Summary The ways House hears, sees, smells, touches, and tastes Wilson.



1.
Half the time, you aren't even sure what Wilson is running his mouth about, and normally, you don't care if someone speaking to you notices that you stopped paying attention several minutes ago. But when Wilson speaks, you try to at least give the appearance of listening, if not the real thing, just so he won't stop talking. His voice is soothing, with its dramatic highs and lows, and when he talks to you, his voice takes on a special tone. At least, that's what you like to think.

2.
No matter what you're doing, you always look up from it when you catch a glimpse of anything vaguely resembling Wilson walking by. When you speak, you keep your gaze squarely fixed on him, seeing yourself reflected in his large, dark eyes, as if trying to burn his image into your memory in case you lose the original. Because, even after ten years and all he has stupidly sacrificed, you still brace yourself for the day he will inevitably leave.

3.
Some mornings, you wake up and swear that you can smell breakfast being prepared, usually pancakes, and once you are fully awake, it disappears and you remind yourself that was a year ago and only for a month, and he was never going to stay as a permanent arrangement. More than before, you want to take whatever Wilson has prepared for his own lunch, but you are no longer sure whether he would tolerate that behavior, so you settle for catching the scent of familiar meals on his breath when he stands too close.

4.
He isn't a touchy-feely kind of guy, even though his personality suggests it. Wilson's hands are always tucked away in his pockets or in crossed arms, whether he is chatting up a nurse or telling a patient they're going to die. You exude “hands-off,” and he, unfortunately, adheres to it in general, choosing instead to stop short mere centimeters away and serving only to throw you off more than normal when he does reach over to take something from you, touch your shirt, tie one of those damned ties for those three occasions per year that you actually need them, and a few you don't.

5.
You're glad to find out that he doesn't taste like alcohol, letting you know this isn't a mistake or desperation and won't be forgotten by morning.

Comments

[identity profile] sandssavvy.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 12:01 am (UTC)
Awww.

And Woot for the last sense!
[identity profile] aricakes.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 12:03 am (UTC)
Aw! I love. It's very sweet.
[identity profile] hry2007.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 12:12 am (UTC)
Lovely. Well-done second person is my favorite style.
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:47 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I never read second-person until I started reading H/W fanfic, and now I'm pretty fond of it, too.
[identity profile] petrichor-fizz.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 04:52 pm (UTC)
I didn't even notice it was second person for a while, which I think is always a good sign.
[identity profile] triedunture.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 12:27 am (UTC)
Wow, #5 kills me with awesome.

*is ded*
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:48 pm (UTC)
Yes, I killed someone!

*crosses off of list*
[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_auberginedream/ wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:02 am (UTC)
I absolutely loved this. Since it was shorrt, every sentence ended up with a profound meaning. I think you nailed House's POV perfectly, making his observations believable.
The last sentence....

YAY!
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:49 pm (UTC)
Thanks for reading =)
[identity profile] thewlisian-afer.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:50 am (UTC)
Lovely, especially 4. That's something I focus on a lot when writing Wilson -- the touchy-feely personality without the actual touchy-feeliness.
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:54 pm (UTC)
Thanks. Wilson's feely/no-touchiness is tricky (which is one reason why I can't seem to finish longer fics).
[identity profile] laurazel.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 02:34 am (UTC)
Great great final!!! You made my day with this fic!!! <3<3<3
[identity profile] genagirl.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 03:09 am (UTC)
Oh - love! Much love - much, much love.
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:55 pm (UTC)
I feel loved <3
[identity profile] style-30.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 04:10 am (UTC)
Aww. I love this: "Because, even after ten years and all he has stupidly sacrificed, you still brace yourself for the day he will inevitably leave."
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 01:58 pm (UTC)
, but shh >_>
[identity profile] sorion.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 05:29 am (UTC)
#5 is perfect. The perfect ending to the senses.

At first I wasn't sure where you would take this, but... *is in awe*
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 02:00 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I wasn't sure where I was going at first, but then the last line popped in my head ("Taste! Duh!")
[identity profile] sessile29.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 08:53 am (UTC)
I really likey #2. Props to #5 for packing a wallop in one sentence. Yay to good ficcy. :)
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 02:02 pm (UTC)
Those are the two I think came out best =) Thanks!
[identity profile] housepiglet.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 2nd, 2007 02:02 pm (UTC)
Ooh, lovely, lovely stuff.

I particularly liked #4, and #5 took me by happy surprise :)
[identity profile] iosonosara.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 5th, 2007 10:36 am (UTC)
Whoa it's amazing! I liked it soo much.
And the final line is just too sweet and good.

... Can I translate it to italian? Of course crediting you.
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 5th, 2007 03:21 pm (UTC)
Thanks! Yeah, go ahead =D
[identity profile] iosonosara.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 5th, 2007 04:12 pm (UTC)
Whoa, good! I'll give you the link when I'll be done^^.
(Anonymous) wrote:
Jun. 6th, 2007 04:08 am (UTC)
oh man, the ending is wonderful!
[identity profile] ranrata.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 6th, 2007 06:38 pm (UTC)
Thanks!

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